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Post by Ryoka on Dec 20, 2018 13:47:00 GMT -5
Bloodline Name: Neon Control Bloodline Functions: Those who have Neon Control grants the user access to the clan's advance element, Neon Release. Bloodline Traits:-Radiant Speed: The user becomes quicker due to being able to employ neon into their nervous system to increase their speed by +40. -First Light: As Neon Release is a combination of wind and lightning chakra, Neon is considered to be a more advanced version of wind with the ability to inflict degree burns while still holding wind chakra properties such as cutting and slashing. All Neon Release techniques' power or speed are increased by one rank. Alternatively, the user is also able to use neon to enhance the power or speed of either lightning or wind techniques. (The user must choose either enhance neon, wind, or lightning techniques by their speed or strength. They cannot switch once they've chosen their element to enhance). -Optical Thermal Vision: Because Neon radiates heat due to the heat itself from lightning chakra, the user is able to take advantage of this feature by detecting heat signatures of living beings within 60 feet through solid objects. They are able to differentiate heat signatures from different humans and animals, and giving them the ability to also detect heat from fire and lightning jutsu. Originating Clan: Hamasaki Clan
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Post by Oliver on Dec 22, 2018 15:31:56 GMT -5
Alright, let's get cracking.
Remove the 'Users of Neon Control are also able to increase the speed or power of either their neon, lightning, or wind techniques and also utilize it to detect heat signatures due to lightning giving off heat.' from function- functions are things all bloodlines get passively without taking traits, so all you really need there is neon release imo. Feel free to debate this if you disagree though.
Radiant speed is good, but maybe clarify that only speed is increased- reaction speed increases with speed, and I can see some asshole later down the line taking this trait and saying he gets an additional +40 to reaction in addition to whatever they get for speed.
I like First Light. It looks good.
Optical Thermal Vision is cool but I have a few questions- does it work through solid objects, or is it obscured? Can it detect heat from fire or lightning jutsu? Can they distinguish different people from heat signatures, or do they just sort of detect a blob of heat?
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Post by Yatagarasu on Dec 22, 2018 16:28:40 GMT -5
Approved. Have fun!~
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